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vlclasby
vickie clasby
United States, TN, Franklin

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Knockout -Wee Challenge#41

William grabbed the water hose and garden hoe. No rain again today. None for the last two weeks, along with afternoon highs in the nineties.

The carefully planned garden in the corner of the yard, the envy of his suburban neighbors, was a showplace of color and symmetry last month. It now looked like a blighted wasteland, despite his conscientious daily watering. William’s spirits were as wilted as the rosebuds. His prized fuschia Knockouts were down for the count.

He wiped his forehead with a grimy handkerchief and surveyed the damage. Bright impatiens, delicate lobelias, portulacas and petunias, withered, ruined. He dropped the hose and bent down for a closer look. The formerly hardy leaves of all his sedum, the only plants holding their own during the dry spell, except the weeds, were jagged, apparently chewed.

A slight movement from the edge of his vision caught his attention. William’s face flushed. He stood up quickly, turning from side to side, and saw the culprit three feet to his left, perfectly still, poised to bolt. Grabbing the hoe, he lunged toward the dun-colored rabbit with unbridled fury.

“Daddy! Did you see the pretty bunny? Can we catch it?”

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Lee Lacuna Comment by: Lee Lacuna - 2008-07-30 18:17
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I read the dialogue line as William's, thinking it an odd thing to say, but reading the piece again I see it's meant to be his child's. That's probably my fault (I'm not the brightest flower in the rose garden). However, some intimation that a child was in the vicinity - perhaps tripping over a toy or something - would remedy that.

Otherwise, nicely told.
krademacher Comment by: krademacher Online- 2008-07-29 16:40
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Yes honey. Watch me catch the cute widdle bunny...

Good one vickie.
alcarty Comment by: alcarty - 2008-07-26 09:08
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'...delicate lobelias...' Fresh, colorful descriptions. I don't worry about rabbit damage since I garden in containers. But I chase the varmints away before the cats spot them and bring them back as trophies. Good read, Vickie.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-07-26 06:39
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William, chicken-fry that rabbit! Mmmmmmmm. Dandy piece, Vickie!
heidiheimler Comment by: heidiheimler - 2008-07-25 18:51
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Phew. Glad an intervention occurred and the rabbit was spared.
Lovely story - in technicolor : )
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