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crackednotbroken
Identity Crisis
United States, Texas

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My Child

You arrived in the wee hours of the night, panic stricken I thought I was dying, that we'd never meet. I cursed all those who never warned me about the pain, about the joy I would someday miss, God! I held you for so many days and nights, without ever once removing my gaze. Scared, but in love with your sweet face, your forehead, where I loved to put soft kisses. So perfect were your tiny lips, everyone thought so. So full of energy, fullblown mischiveous excitement, you told tall tales, so detailed, long narrations of Nintendo game conquests, and so many animal facts. Remember how confused hairdos made you? Your frozen gaze would lock in, no one's hair was safe and you'd exclaim, "You have funny hair!"? Remember when I asked you how mine looked and you said with eyes so loving and serious, "It's so beautiful!"? You've changed, now we hardly speak at all. Now I cry every time I remember and I am weak, I feel defeated. I haven't found anything so touching, so sweet, so perfect, those days are long gone...my child, where are you?

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crackednotbroken Comment by: crackednotbroken - 2008-08-13 06:46
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Thanks everyone for your lovely comments!
Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-08-12 23:33
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Beautiful write... Loved the how the Nintendo got a mention. For years all I heard from my son is ‘Dad, In Zelda this and in Zelda that', it got a laugh out of me. Though I see the moving on from sweet innocent child into mischievous adolescence, with as much joy as seeing him take his first steps. :D well done loved it.
alien Comment by: alien - 2008-08-11 02:29
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brilliant. can't make any suggestions :)
frees340 Comment by: frees340 - 2008-08-03 14:36
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Wow. I'm scared. This poem makes me think of my not-so-long ago youth. I was totally like that kid. Wow.
But yes, very nice. Very touching. Very motherly and loving.
Vyas
crackednotbroken Comment by: crackednotbroken - 2008-08-02 06:38
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I'm not sure if this is even prose, I don't have any metaphors. Help?
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