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The Beautiful Page
Idea…
A word starts the line. A noun follows, something concrete, perhaps modified with an adjective. These lead to a verb and the rest of the sentence – more words. Sentence follows sentence: a paragraph. Paragraph follows paragraph, until the page is full of words. One page fills and another comes. The writer breathes out his/her soul. Funny, how each page reflects Dorian Gray's Portrait: How many souls does a writer have?
Edit/Revise…
The writer adds the flesh. Flesh as word: measured, weighed, counted. Some fall out; others are added. Each comes from the writer's body, pulled out by the roots, like fingernails and hair and teeth. Until the writer has given all their substance. Funny, how each page is like Lovecraft's Shub-Niggurath of the Thousand Young: How many children can the writer have?
Polish and Shine…
The bitter pen touches the page with writer's blood. Word by word, images for the reader's mind wax and wane as the writer's blood drains onto the page, drop by drop. They take on a life of their own. Funny, how pages feed like an eternal Dracula: How much blood can a writer have?
Illumination – just another beautiful page!
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| Thought provoking piece. I guess it's better to have qualitative art w/in quantitative boundaries than vice versa? Cheers |
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Than you all for your comments - Been thinking about this piece since it flowed from the fingers. It needs a bit of work,and that's what I'll do - hone it up a bit.
Maybe shift the referent images to where they really belong. (middle to beginning, beginning to end, end to middle. Say idea,but I think it will create a better flow of the images. |
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This piece is really insightful and stimulating, Peter. The first stanza is actually my least favorite because the language starts out rather mechanical:
A word starts the line. A noun follows, something concrete, perhaps modified with an adjective. These lead to a verb and the rest of the sentence – more words. Sentence follows sentence: a paragraph. Paragraph follows paragraph, until the page is full of words. >>>In my own mind, when an idea occurs or takes shape, it isn't through the mechanism of just putting words, sentences and paragraphs onto a page. To me, that explanation fails to tie in with the magical quality of the rest of your piece.
The writer breathes out his/her soul. Funny, how each page reflects Dorian Gray's Portrait: How many souls does a writer have?>>>To breathe out one's soul onto the page is a grand thought. I just wonder if there could be a more picturesque way of describing it than the way you do in the first section of the stanza.
BTW...I think, since you are after all a MALE writer, why the pressure about how to express WHOSE soul is being breathed out??? His/her reads like an entry on some kind of official form or memo. Which is what most PC language drives us to with its forced "sensitivity." Let the feminists write their own stuff. Personally, if a writer feels the need to be "gender inclusive" it should be "his, or her," or "her, or his" rather than the impersonal-sounding "his/her"... my opinion only, of course. |
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Comment by: Mick - 2008-08-12 23:14
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How many writers does it take to change a light bulb???
None, they're to busy coming up with ideas, revising and editing their idea and polishing it until it shines so bright they don't need a light bulb. :)
Well done. |
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Comment by: alien - 2008-08-11 02:37
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| really lovely - what a unique idea! :) |
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