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poetguyraza
Muhammad Talha Raza
Pakistan, Punjab, Rawalpindi

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To my Love

This is a poem for my love,
A love of mine which I’m not sure even exists,
Not in reality I think, but in my heart of course,
I will find her, or maybe I already have.
Somewhere she is around me; touched her I have.
I have felt her presence; maybe she has felt mine.
Well wherever she is, whatever her work,
I hope she reads this, understandingly she does.
All I want to tell her are a few words,
Very simple these are, easily comprehendible.
I love you, I want you, I need you that’s it.
I just want to tell you no matter what you’re mine,
If you’re ugly you’re a flower to my eyes,
If you’re deaf you can hear all my words,
If you’re blind you can see al my love,
If you’re dumb then honey I can hear you cry.
But beauty you’re all I got, please love me deep.
I don’t ask for riches or your dad’s fame,
All I need is your love, your love for me.
Not for my body, not for my prestige,
but for my soul and the spirit within.
I’m not gonna change, I’m gonna stay this childish,
But you’ll accept that and love me for who I am.
If I’m a child be one with me,
If I’m stubborn, slap me then hug me,
If I suck at life, don’t give up on me,
Because I need you, you know I do.
Like I said you’re all I have,
My future and my destiny, it’s all you.
It’s all up to you, to whom I’m handing myself,
You’re the maker or breaker of my life.
A stupid note people may think this is.
To a non-existing creature as they might say.
But I know you’re there, reading this now,
Making sense of it all and thinking about me,
Remember I love you and I love you true,
This is only a short summary of my life with you..!!

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Swimmy Comment by: Swimmy - 2008-09-14 09:52
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You have mad skill at conveying thoughts and emotions into a this-is-what-I-have-to-say type of love poem with out all the cliche metaphors, good job
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2008-09-11 03:36
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Your writing is pretty mature in nature for a 13 year old. When I was 13, I was still playing with dolls. I do like your poem, particularly the line, "if you're ugly you're a flower to my eyes." Very nice.
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-09-10 05:55
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This is a very touching piece...Love it ;)
rabableo Comment by: rabableo - 2008-08-03 01:29
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Beautiful sentiments, my dear. I like every word of it, especially the "If's". Those convey the strongest emotion anyone can feel. Well done, darling. :)
nivipooh Comment by: nivipooh - 2008-08-02 12:36
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Wow, that was one good poem. Stark emotions just laid down in front raw and seeking seeking the right one, whenever that is.
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