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Shirine Aouad
Canada, Quebec, Montreal

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Keen hero, church of the universe

Strength is an illusion
Warring against the improbable
Sighing behind the thick walls of hope

An electron, frenetically bound
To the motions of an orbit
Soulless, empty of innocence
Dispenses the energy of impuissance
Of the ineluctable

Eroded by this devotion
Restless, at an irreducible distance
From the source of my purpose
My only rebellion is to refuse
My alienated nature

We repel one another
And our sun charges us with
A journey of eternity

An eternity of denial,
Unfree, irretrievable
Subservient

My love I will not serve
My love I will not honor
I flee the mark
That has branded me alive
That has lifted me from my weary knees

Remembrance, my love I will not
I will not retrieve my integrity
From your grasp
Faith, my love I will not
I will not be whole

Humility, my love I will
Seize freedom by the tail
My love I will forgo clarity

From incessancy, freefall
From a p2 orbit, a parabola

Mockery, my love
One cannot catch
A probability

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LocustsCoatRack Comment by: LocustsCoatRack - 2008-08-20 08:54
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"Sighing behind the thick walls of hope," reminds me greatly of the theme of the Bell Jar, but here it is so beautifully succinct. A novel's worth of density in one stanza, one line really. "I will forgo clarity" is also one of the most passionate parings of words I think I've read. Great piece.
rhino5 Comment by: rhino5 - 2008-08-02 11:57
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I like this very much! Great imagery!
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