writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
lflwriter
Lloyd Lofthouse
United States, Califoronia, Walnut Creek

Words: 190
Access: Public
Comments: 4

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Left Alone

I was thirteen
The first time they
Left me alone.

Watching a black & white
Frankenstein,
Every sound
A serial killer;
Every imagined whisper
At windows
Dracula or Wolf-man.

My fingers and toes the appetizers
My torso the main course.
My brain a desert
Clogging arteries
Considering
My imagination.

Steve Allen on
The Tonight Show
said, “Smock, smock, smock.”

After midnight,
I hid in the bushes
Around the house.

By two
I was in the darkness
Of the orange grove
Across the street.

It had to be safe among
The friendly green giants
With sweet, juicy
Naval oranges
Hanging heavy from limbs.

In my haste to find safety
Away from spooky noises
I forgot to take my jacket .
There was frost on the trees.
Vapor trails snitched on me.

At three I was
Behind locked doors.
With the twelve inch
Butcher knife
My dad used to carve roasts
And a thick stick,
With my heart
A drum,
I looked into
Every closet;
Under every bed.

When I heard
Car doors and familiar voices,
I put the knife back
In its block;
Hid the stick
In my closet
And faked sleep.

Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
jcp200817 Comment by: jcp200817 - 2008-08-14 16:02
Add to Readers
      
Being left alone is something every little kid fears one time or another. You captured the feeling of it so well in this poem. Really good work.
Apheliac Comment by: Apheliac - 2008-08-11 11:39
Add to Readers
      
Though I can't imagine myself at thirteen feeling like this, I like the poem. Very descriptive with short, snappy lines; love the lines

Every sound
A serial killer.

Nice write :)
FantasticFantasy Comment by: FantasticFantasy - 2008-08-05 16:33
Add to Readers
      
This is a sad poem...
I love the line "Vapor trails snitched on me."
That's amazing...
= ]
fisherman1369 Comment by: fisherman1369 - 2008-08-03 10:36
Add to Readers
      
Very descriptive of a 13yo nightmare of being left alone for the first time. The imagination you have captured is wonderful. Great read.
1

Sponsored Ads


By lflwriter

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S