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barking mad
Richard Unwin
United Kingdom, Manchester

Words: 144
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Snowfall

Though the snow seems to fall in quietness
it is not quite so:
The foot-padding snow squeals
and crunches as it is crushed under-foot,
each individual, exquisite flake pressed down -
clean, virgin, pure?
They die with a gasp and are not loud,
but have their say in whispers;
for the white of a snowfall is twinned with the dark,
its frost with the twinkling of stars,
black and silver deep,
blue shadows pooled in white.
There are no secrets in the snow;
even the slightest movement is known,
written,
powdered, easily upset
but layered in protection
as the soft, downy under-feather of angels
smooth over pitfalls.
Such is the face of God
where we proceed by faith
and trust we may not fall,
though if we do,
what is preserved will emerge in the spring
to resolve the puzzle of what became of us.

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Min Comment by: Min - 2006-03-11 07:54
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Up to the 'pitfalls' I was with you and expected more. The last few lines made a tidy ending.
Comment by: - 2006-03-08 14:37
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I was really getting into the beauty of snow and the lovely image containing the contrast of night..but you blew me away with the "smoothing of pitfalls" and the "emerging puzzle in spring....you took this metaphor and image through layers of meaning...WELL CRAFTED ..is an understatement. - Leah
Comment by: - 2006-03-07 08:05
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i enjoy it keep it up
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2006-03-06 14:53
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I'm a winter person so I really enjoyed the visuals of fresh snow crunching under foot, could hear it even. you lost me for a while there, but picked me up again at the end. for the most part, I enjoyed this one. Ron
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