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jcp200817
Carlos Perez
United States, NC, Dobson

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The People Who Really Matter pt1 (Re-edit)

(A/N...Most of this is true, except for the part about the character coming home from Iraq. In Reality I was coming home from a concert. I am not even in the military. I just thought it would add to the reading experience.)



On my way back to town many things where going through my head. Many of which I want to kick myself for thinking. I had been in Iraq for two years and I was finally getting a chance to come home for a few weeks to see my family. This was something I had dreamed of since the day I arrived there, coming back to see the people I know and love.

It had been way too long since I had last seen them face to face and I hoped that they hadn't changed too much. I wasn't one to like drastic change, it made me feel uncomfortable if not nervous. Another person that I wanted to see was my girlfriend. Even though I didn't get many letters from her, I blame it on the postal service, I knew she still loved me. I would always love her.

As I drew closer to her house I turned up the radio up louder and sung along to our song. It was the first song I sung for her, but definitely not the last. It was back when I was still trying to express my love for her. It was the best song I could think of. So there I was with a bouquet of red roses, a teddy bear and singing along to Landon Piggs' “Falling In Love At A Coffee Shop”.

“I think that possibly, maybe I'm falling for you
Yes there's a chance that I've fallen quite hard over you.
I've seen the waters that make your eyes shine
now I'm shinning too”

My hands got sweaty and my heart starting beating faster. I guess it was because I was so nervous to see her again. Or maybe it was because of the thoughts that were going through my head again. With all the preparation I received with the Marines nothing they taught me could have prepared me for the thing that was going to happen next.

I didn't have to even get out of the car when I saw what I had feared. Sara Beth was outside, I guess coming home from a date, with another man, hugging. She had her arms around him and he her. They looked like a high school couple out on their first date. Nervous as hell but still not being able to wait for the first kiss.

I should have left at the hug but I still couldn't believe what was going on. Just as soon as they let go of each other for a minute they were back together embraced by the muscles of the mouth. My heart was broken beyond repair. I don't think I will every be able to love someone else in my life ever again.

With a tear beginning to form in my eye, I left her road with out saying a single word to her. I just wanted to make it home to the people who really mattered.

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Darren Comment by: Darren - 2008-08-13 13:35
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Great way to end it, but why not be more descriptive with what you saw. Describing the pain is good, but it would be even better if you spoke in detail of their embrace. The way she looked at him, her reaction to his touch, etc...
FantasticFantasy Comment by: FantasticFantasy - 2008-08-03 21:38
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T_T
What a BYOTCH!!!

This is a very sad piece, and I don't think many of us realize that things like this happen all the time.
That would TOTALLY SUCK.
Nice write Carlos.

And leonarda,
Watch your mouth!
>=O
FakeSmile Comment by: FakeSmile - 2008-08-03 19:51
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wow.......thats fucked up man!!!

why would someone do that to someone that REALLY does love them!!!
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