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vlclasby
vickie clasby
United States, TN, Franklin

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A Fine Line-Wee Challenge#42

They say there’s a fine line between genius and insanity.

The insanity, well, DeWayne got that honest. There ain’t no laws against the ‘mentally challenged’ reproducing, so Bertha and Elmer Roach had twelve young ’uns, none of them right in the head. But DeWayne, the last one, well, he was different alright.

DeWayne Roach never learned to get to the outhouse before shittin’ himself. But he could build and play a twelve-string guitar. His smarts sure wasn’t from book learning. McDowell County, West Virginia never heard of ‘No Child Left Behind.’ There was no place in school for the Roach clan.

DeWayne spent his days wanderin’ around touchin’ stuff. He figured things out by feelin’ em, pickin’ em up and turnin’ em around. One day I caught him in my shed, touchin’ my can of kerosene. I tole him, ‘Git outta there, retard! Yore gonna ketch something on far!”

When the smoke cleared, there weren’t nothing left but a smoldering pile of timbers. And DeWayne standin’ there, covered in soot, hands blistered, grinning.

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mark22 Comment by: mark22 - 2008-08-19 01:56
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Superb, liked the language ("Yore gonna ketch something on far!") very well done, and the idea is immediately believable. This would be a good style to write longer pieces in.
josephzozaya Comment by: josephzozaya - 2008-08-18 14:45
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nice piece, put together w/ some nice personal touches & hearty local flavor.

this was confusing at 1st: "The insanity, well, DeWayne got that honest."
but once you continue reading, the regional dialect becomes apparent. Appalachian lore...
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-08-09 07:50
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A feller that can build and play a 12 string can't be all bad. I see a bright future for DeWayne on the rock-n-roll stage featuring a lot of pyrotechnics, heh heh. Very entertaining, Vickie!
WLC Comment by: WLC Online- 2008-08-09 06:38
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Lord I hate to think what would happen when he "touches" some stupid gal. Hmmm...maybe that's what happened with his parents. :P

Very, very amusing piece Vickie.
qpeedore Comment by: qpeedore - 2008-08-08 18:18
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It's pretty funny. I like the comparison to the rest of the children. The craziest in a clan of crazy people. It's nice and it did bring a much-needed smile to my face.
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