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Audiogeist
Sharon Harriott
United Kingdom, London

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Piss artist

Take care, I’m barely holding on,
A far cry from the coaster ride
That pre-empted all that went wrong.

Skid to a stop, before headlong
Pressing self-destruct, I’ve veered wide
Take care, I’m barely holding on

Funny I pretend I’m so strong
Since it was me that really lied,
And pre-empted all that went wrong.

‘course, the next sucker won’t be long
Flutter lashes, tip chin, he’s spied.
Take care, I’m barely holding on.

Honestly? It’s the same old song.
Guilty? Yes. The ‘look’ had them tied
And pre-empted all that went wrong.

I like the attention; the guilt is wrong,
Behind closed doors I’ve hurt and cried.
Take care, I’m barely holding on.
It’s pre-empted all that went wrong.





Sharon Harriott
05 August 2008

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wizzer Comment by: wizzer Online- 2008-08-28 17:18
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seeminly sparse words with repetition written in a way that mimics the fight to hold on. no breath for more than the essentials and yet it shows/ tells so much so well
love it
xxx geo
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2008-08-09 23:12
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Strange how you find writing that relates to whats going on in your own life. Its good to read your work again. ;)
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2008-08-07 07:48
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Thank you - really appreciate your comments.

Karen & lflwriter - spot on with the synopsis :)

This is a villanelle poem (a Stephen Fry favourite apparently)

XX
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-08-07 06:50
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When you can get Karen Jones to review a poem you KNOW you've done something special, heh heh. Excellent, Sharon!
lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-08-06 18:20
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What is it that Shakespeare said in one of his poem? "All the world is a stage and we are wearing masks hiding who we really are." Those aren't his exact words but it pretty much sums up what he was trying to say and that's what I saw in this poem. Each man/woman is an island and we hang on desperately hoping something good will come along and shine a light in the darkness. The narrator in this poem is not alone. Most of us are just hanging on and we are all one heart beat away from oblivion. Good things do come along. The sad thing is that they don’t always stay.
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