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jcp200817
Carlos Perez
United States, NC, Dobson

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Come Along

She left me with a hollow feeling in my chest.
Not because she took my heart rather
because I decided to cut it out and
lock it away in a safe of insecurities.

Come along
the door may be locked
but I will slip you the key.

I'm ready for something new
where pretty lies will once again
rule my world and trash it about.

I locked my heart away
where no one could reach it
but come along, I'll slip you the key.

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jcp200817 Comment by: jcp200817 - 2008-09-19 13:50
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I like this version, I like what you did with mine and transformed it into something different; and yes with a totally different meaning.
nonalienabductee Comment by: nonalienabductee - 2008-09-19 13:07
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She hollowed me out.
Left my heart, but so brittle
I had to cut it out
and put it away.

Come on, what are you trying to do?
Nothing in this body to touch,
no love to quicken.
Move along.

The safe is locked.
There may be a key,
but it's protected.
What would you want with it
anyway?
Go on;
I'm in no mood for come-ons.

You're something new
that's come along,
but you're just more
pretty lies
in a pretty face.
Come on.
Who do you think
you're fooling?

Moving on--
why? I locked my heart up
for a reason.
So nobody could come along
and break it carelessly.
Move along.

You're leaving--
why do I want to come along?
No. Don't move on.
I'm coming on.
Don't go.
I'll slip you the key.

The meaning's diffent here. What do you think of this version?
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