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Icy Sedgwick
United Kingdom, London

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Outside Chance (challenge 42)

Celia put down the binoculars, reaching for her handbag. She dipped a beautifully manicured hand into its depths, pulling out the rumpled list of runners for the 2:50pm race. The odds confused her so she ran her eyes down the names instead. Charles often made fun of her for betting on horses by name, but he stopped laughing last week when Montezuma's Horizon won with odds of 40/1. Celia's bet of £40 didn't seem so silly after that.

"Charles, which one are you betting on?" she asked.

"I’m putting money on two of them. Terrabyte of Doom and Wessex Whirlwind”, replied Charles, fiddling with his cufflinks.

Celia looked up the names. Terrabyte of Doom was running at 3/2, Wessex Whirlwind at 8/1. She assumed they must be good odds or he wouldn’t have bet on them. She trusted his judgment in these matters.

“Have you chosen one, darling?” asked Charles.

“The names are so boring in this race. Only one of them has caught my eye so far”, she replied.

“Which one?”

“Outside Chance”.

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karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-08-08 15:06
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Yep, as Nora says, get those punctuation marks inside the inverted commas when using direct speech. Apart from that, a very good story - love the female 'reasoning'.

Thanks for the read.

Cheers

Karen
Nora Comment by: Nora Online- 2008-08-08 10:44
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That was great. The only critique I ever seem to want to make with your work is to tuck in your punctuation.

“Outside Chance(.)"

Check your commas, too.

But for real, that was a well-drawn scene and the last line was groovy. I love a chick who gambles like I do: never based on facts, just a hunch.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-08-08 08:02
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Ah, another good ‘un! Very well written and a dandy use of the theme.
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