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The Tale of an Only Sister
'Come,' you said
taking me by the hand
leading me over the jagged rocks
so I wouldn't get wet.
'I'll show you my song,' you said
and once in the cave
(sure no one could hear you)
you sang out your heart
with a clear voice
and eyes shining brightly.
'Do you see it?' you asked.
And I saw.
But the next time you looked at me
there was a deep scar on your cheek
and your eyes were dead
like a stone
polished clean.
And I saw.
I saw you withering.
I saw Father
with a green piece of glass
from a beer bottle
in his hand.
If I am a sister
I have a dead brother
and if I'm an only child
then I'll have trouble explaining
that fat drunk
too young to be my father
too old to be a son
on the sofa
rambling about performing
with crappy lyrics
and hoarse voice
to be greeted with applause
like no other.
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| I'm referring to the brother in the last stanza - 'if I am a sister, I have a dead brother' - dead inside - but then, 'if I'm an only child', how do I explain who the hell that idiot is?! (BTW - this is not a personal poem.) I added a couple lines to the stanza too, to prevent the confusion :) thank you for commenting. |
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| Nice. (Well, not "nice" - but you know what I mean...) I became a bit confused at the end, though: "and if I'm an only child - then I'll have trouble explaining - that fat drunk - on the sofa {I don't get the connection between being an only child and being unable to explain a horrid father} - rambling about performing - with crappy lyrics - and hoarse voice {is he rambling about YOU performing, or about his own performance?} - to be greeted with applause - like no other {you are greeted by applause, or he is?}" |
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| This is very beautiful. Its soft at the beginning but gets harsher or more cynical towards the end. Great read! |
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