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alcarty
Al Carty
United States, New Mexico, Milan

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A Fine Line

It was Saturday afternoon in the bunk-house and the other boys had cleared for town. Howard looks up from shavin’ and says, “Well, Lefty! How come you ain’t with the widder? Figured you’d be hitched by now?” Ol’ Lefty looked like someone just shot his dog.

“Howdy, fellers. Me and the widder won’t be standin’ in the traces, after all.”

“Hell, Lefty,” says I, “she seemed to think you was just ‘bout the boss, and you said she could cook like anything.”

“Well, that’s so, fellers, but things got a mite tangled. She starts off sayin’ I had a fine line of talk, ‘count of my bringin’ po’try an’ flars an’all. Prit’ soon, I’d eat a meal and then here come the chores. And there warn’t no ‘please’ to it, neither. More like, ‘you’ll want to git to it, ‘afore it gits dark!' A loose shingle, a busted winder, dang!”

“What ‘bout now?” says Howard.

“Ah, she took up with Elmer Bass, from the gen’ral store. Be getting’ nails an’ shingles free now, I reckon.”

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alcarty Comment by: alcarty - 2008-08-09 08:14
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If I write much more about these guys, I won't be able to use proper English at all! Thanks, Wanda.

I'm glad you caught that, Arley. Away I go.
WLC Comment by: WLC Online- 2008-08-08 18:28
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hahaha--she had better be getting them nails and shingles for free. Tit for tat and all that. The old west was wild, weren't it? Great read Al.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-08-08 15:27
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Always a pleasure to pay ol' Lefty a visit, and another great job with the dialect, Al!

More like, ‘you'll want to git to it, ‘afore it gits dark!
(Need to close the widder's words with an apostrophe)
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