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Tonight
Hold me tonight
Hold me close
Let me find solace in your bosom
From the cold sadness of this world
Tonight
Feed me with your love
Cover my nakedness with the cloak of passion
Let me drink of your wine
The wine of kisses from your lips
Tonight
Quench my thirst
Feed me and solve my hunger
Quell my fears
Heal my sickness
And save me from this darkness
Tonight
Let me find refuge in your love
Hold me tight in the comfort of your arms
Do not let me slip away
Protect me from this confusion
That threatens to overwhelm me
Tonight
Heal my wounds
With sweet love from your heart
Save me from boredom
And make me breathless with excitement
Tonight
I plead with you
Stay with me
That we may both enjoy this moment
And forget the dark, evil world out there
Tonight, just tonight
Let us assume there is no tomorrow.
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There were some good ideas expressed here though there was some repetition of themes. Also, wine of kisses is a bit cliched. I feel if you could tighten this poem and lose some of the repetition (like 'holding me tight') the poem would work better.
Some things were very personal and subjective, which some people may not like, such as the last 3 lines. I myself sometimes find it hard to take these type of poems seriously because the writer isnt showing how dark and evil the world is - ie those poems which are telling instead of showing. This one was on the fence, and was more about the closeness, and the desire - and I was able to sympathise with this feeling of just wanting to shut up shop and spend time with those you love.
