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fang13bea
Hayley McNichol
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United States, Michigan, Farwell

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No Pun Intended

I lay on my bed, staring up at the ceiling, trying to find patterns in the drywall. My mind wanders off and I think that these sorts of walls are so I can receive cosmic messages. It’s subtle, but those messages are there. I see a skeleton.

My bedroom doors flies open and in the frame, stands Jason, my fiance.

“Lilia,” he cries, “Why do you shut me out?” I stare at him, trying to make sense of what just happened. I look back up at the ceiling and laugh at how stupid I was

“Hun, I can’t close my closet.” I say, trying to hold back a bark of laughter.

“Why not? I’ll fix it for you!” He exclaims.

“There are just too many skeletons.” I say and fall off the bed laughing. There is no way I can shut him out.

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lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-08-11 11:12
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Amazing how quickly we can be brought back to the real world with the opening of a door. But then, what is the real world?
frees340 Comment by: frees340 - 2008-08-09 14:27
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Wow. Twisted, deep, and funny, but with very precise detail. Cool. I like it.
It could be better! Not! Haha! Its small and fun. Like you, I"m sure.
Deadgnome Comment by: Deadgnome - 2008-08-09 14:10
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Concise little piece here, my only critique would be trying to show more than basically just telling he said this, she looked, etc. Also in the last line of dialogue "to" should be "too." Enjoyed the sentiment at the end.
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