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SusanCulver
Susan Culver
United States

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Do You Really Want to be My Hero?

It won't be easy,
there in the lamp burn, the sea
of slender feet and you with your mind
on war, your palace and its sigh impatient;
you, with your pressing politics, no time
for that damned glass slipper
in the rush of the would be king.

It won't be easy,
there in the heather hollows, miles
from my burning village and you,
in your knight suit; you, with your smooth
steed, your adrenaline glow;
you, with a hundred maidens
all equal in need and distance.

It won't be easy,
there in the beachlands, the flash
in the pan and you, with your persistent
life, your gold dreams; you, with a family
and a family and a family; you,
with only a half breath
with which to breathe in the otherwise.

It won't be easy,
there in the shell shocked section
of the city and you, with your gated mansion,
your languid hours; you with your fast car,
your finer things; you, with your trips
to the moon, your secret lingerings
on this side of the tracks.

It won't be easy,
there in the war zone, on the rage stage,
the places of me that I don't understand;
you, with your eternal hope, your dark
red defiance; you, with a sword
in your hand and my name on your lips;
you, who could maybe save me.

Baby, it won't be easy.


(Previously published by Leaf Press)

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Zed Comment by: Zed - 2008-01-27 04:08
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This is beautifully executed. A mix of dream & reality, I like it very much.
Ditto the comment above from flamof.
Promking007 Comment by: Promking007 - 2007-07-09 08:39
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Nice word play here used in contrasting and bridging worlds. How is the modern-day prince to act in the digital world where anything less than self-effacing humor and tilting at windmills is considered piety and braggadocio?
nikkinicole Comment by: nikkinicole - 2007-06-23 20:22
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That poem deserves two snaps and a twist. I loved it. I can imagine that glass slipper, feel the heat from the burning village, hear the hooves of the galloping horse...bravo!
kerribug Comment by: kerribug - 2007-06-16 22:31
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I am new at this, but this is probably the best poem I have read so far. I really like the reality of the poem.
PANeufeldt Comment by: PANeufeldt - 2007-06-04 18:54
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I like how this changes pace, slows down and almost shouts at the same time, then moves smoothly to the next scene.
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