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phillmag
phillip maguire
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United States, pa., middletown

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Dream #9

a w9oman

vaguely pai9nted

wi9th a name whi9le

we were all there

c9ollecti9vely

n9ot i9ndi9vi9dually

but there t9ogether

s9ome dream c9ommuni9ty

a sch9o9ol 9or rehab perhaps

feeli9ng ri9sky anxi9ous

i9f decei9t di9sc9overed

we need t9o leave

but why

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phillmag Comment by: phillmag Online- 2008-08-29 04:07
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It is shreds of a dream, and when I went to type it, my fat fingers would hit the 9 key when I tried to type "o" or "i".
bebelestrange Comment by: bebelestrange - 2008-08-28 22:26
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Love this strange yet quality piece...it feels as though you pulled it quite literally out of a dream.
Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-08-15 05:05
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Love the obscurity of the piece... it makes your eyes jump all over the page thinking...'9is thi9s fo9r re9al?'...lol. Loved it. :)
DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-08-13 18:32
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Very good work. I having been thinking a lot. Best wishes.
frees340 Comment by: frees340 - 2008-08-12 16:34
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Interesting use of the number nine, both literally and as a figurative device. An exciting poem, to be sure.
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