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skypoetone
Tony Downing
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United Kingdom, NE Lincolnshire, Somewhere in North East Lincs

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In the name of God

‘God only knows’ tolled the tune, a blood sister
reforming and back in the flock – cognitive prodding.

‘What’s my name?’

A jab, then uppercuts to remind her.

Flayed, swayed and finally floored.

Rewinding – a walk where others once found me.

Nails did penetrate to remind her, intensifying the name of god.

Whispers cascade, die to a moment - lost like emptiness.

Death breathes in graveyards, hangs in trees to remind her.

An autumn took its fall, winter crystallized tears,
no sheep in our field that spring.

Both innocent and broken taste the same dank air
but the name of god permeates to remind her.

© 2002

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skypoetone Comment by: skypoetone Online- 2008-08-14 13:24
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LOL, Wendy... banquets are my speciality! ;)
mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic - 2008-08-14 13:13
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O.O

Sacrilegious truffle layered with an angsty "Wuthering Heights" tortured romance vibe!

Nom Nom Nom!
inverted alchemy Comment by: inverted alchemy - 2008-08-14 07:20
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Debate and thought, who would know the difference?
Same process but externalised and internalised, and both fraught with directional violence.
skypoetone Comment by: skypoetone Online- 2008-08-14 05:32
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Well read... Violent images are those belonging to biblical scriptures. Emotive they are, taken as one perceives, be they necessary or unnecessary. The poem is not a premise for debate but for thought. ~T
inverted alchemy Comment by: inverted alchemy - 2008-08-14 04:16
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"Death breathes in graveyards, hangs in trees to remind her."
The personification is intriguing.
The remembrances are cued by something in the world and I am filled with a sense of emotive violence.
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