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This may sound strange.
Sometimes when you are sleeping, I watch you. Just to make sure you don’t get up and crawl away. And the next morning you always ask me why I look so tired, and I always lie to you. I tell you I had a nightmare, and couldn’t fall back asleep. I won’t tell you the truth, because it would scare you. I want to tell you that I love you and don’t want you to leave.
I know that if you ever did leave, I wouldn’t be able to stop you. I stay up late at night, so that if you do leave, I at least have a chance to say goodbye.
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| Wow this is a good. I like the message that it sends. I know I would be creeped out if I knew that I was being stared at and watched all night! Very good, keep up the good work! |
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Comment by: Louise - 2008-08-19 06:18
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| This is great - it strikes me as being a female voice too. I love this because there is a definate grain of truth in it. Every sane person has behaviour or thoughts that are a little strange and I think it's true that no matter how secure your relationship is, there is always a part of you trying to keep the crazy in, in case it gets too much for him. |
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This is a piece that I'm certain more than one person would be able to identify with. It brings out a little bit of that insecurity that some have about relationships, especially marriage or living together.
I get the feeling that the narrator is female, but it could so easily be male as well.
I don't see any spelling or grammatical errors in it, so you're good to go on that. Overall it's a nice snippet of someone's thoughts that really brings things out in the open on the topic of not wanting to lose someone. |
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