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Antonio Beardall
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Belize, Cayo, San Ignacio,

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Heavy Bleach

Struggling home
Carrying two heavy gallons,
Bleach being important to
Make me look clean,
Yet inside I know I am dirty,
And the pain in my neck
Was there before
I dragged that heavy shit home.
I am tired of washing my laundry
Over and over
Trying to get them as white
As you hope they can be.
After my fatigue is gone
From dragging that heavy bleach home
The pain in my neck will be there,
Moving up my body
From being a pain in my ass.

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jcp200817 Comment by: jcp200817 - 2008-08-31 18:40
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Man this really has a lot of humor to it. It flows nicely too. Good job.
WLC Comment by: WLC Online- 2008-08-31 15:39
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Oh God! Too funny. I love when humor slips into poetry.
But yeah, it is a pain in the ass trying to live up to someone else's standard.
KellyE Comment by: KellyE Online- 2008-08-31 14:31
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Very nice piece of work, thank you!
davidfaylin Comment by: davidfaylin - 2008-08-31 10:54
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Man I like this.. It paints a great picture.. Too much bleach though will ruin the garments :) Nice work :) David.
mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic - 2008-08-31 07:22
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LOL! I love your choice of metaphor here. I never seem to get clean enough for anyone either.
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