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frees340
Vyasar Ganesan
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United States, TX, Austin

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Thick and Freak Sense

Skunk bottoms on ragtime dancers wave in my head. A confusing aura of smoke and liquor wafts through the air, making shapes of hips, thighs, and genitalia. Flash-bangs wouldn’t wake this crowd from their hypnotic slumber, nor shake them from their thumping music.

The basement is ideal: sweating walls, no lights, no cops. No room to check your wrist for the time, only to grab someone and romantically tussle. If you weren’t drunk or high before you came in, you most surely were now.

Not a real sound breaks through the silent hubbub, save for a burp, a drunken yell here and there, or a girlish moan of longing. Semi-automatic men start leaving, a few girls at a time. There is now enough room to stretch and vomit.

Somebody asks for a vodka, straight, no chaser. I try to imagine the jazz hitting the back of their throats, loud, rambunctious, and bold. It doesn’t work, so I get one, too.

Garish lights start looking like Dmitri Martin. Foolhardiness is the key, my brain elucidates, and I start looking for whatever scrap of the female population is left.

And then, I see her: the hell-kitten angel, providing me with a drink that made me want to fuck things I had never wanted to fuck before.

Waking up really, really sucked.

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frees340 Comment by: frees340 Online- 2008-09-01 13:58
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It wasn't a dream! He woke up after all that shit went down! It was real! Shit!
jgilgun Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-09-01 09:48
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As I read it, I was there and also hoping that whoever was there didn't get stuck there. So many of us have to push the limits, but to stay there is the pits. I'm glad it was a dream for you. Enjoy what youth has to offer.
phillmag Comment by: phillmag Online- 2008-08-31 17:06
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It's been awhile but this was the scene I can remember. What I can remember, that is. Fast, furious and real.
lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-08-31 16:27
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I imagine waking up from that dream did suck, but the reality would have been worse. After I came back from Vietnam, I drank enough over fourteen years to fill a swimming pool and killed off a few hundred million brain cells. Believe me when I say that there is nothing worth getting that stoned. The price later is horrible. I quit in 1982 when I was a maitre d' in a "large" night club called the Red Onion in Southern California. I partied hard and drank hard between 1966 and 1982. This flash fiction made it sound real except for the pain afterwards.
asiansticks Comment by: asiansticks - 2008-08-31 16:15
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very gritty and dirty...I like it ^_^
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