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The Right Place (Wee challenge # 46)
‘Stop, do you know the place at all?’ Dolly peered at him with annoyance.
‘Honey, I know it is here somewhere’ he gaped at her with a sorry grin.
‘What a nuisance you are - from the time we were married, have you gotten anything right?’ She looked at the address once again.
‘Dolly, I married you. I think I got that right,’ he smiled at her.
With one tooth missing, he looked ridiculous when he smiled. But yet he was adorable.
‘Thank God, you at least got that right.’ She kissed him on the cheek.
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Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-10-01 08:57
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Nice wee scene, Nivedita - cute ending.
I'm in a bit of a rush, so forgive me if I do a quick punctuation edit straight from the original:
‘Stop, do you know the place at all?’ Dolly peered at him with annoyance.
‘Honey, I know it is here somewhere.’ He gaped at her with a sorry grin.
‘What a nuisance you are - from the time we were married, have you gotten anything right?’ She looked at the address once again.
‘Dolly, I married you. I think I got that right.’ He smiled at her.
With one tooth missing, he looked ridiculous when he smiled. But yet he was adorable.
‘Thank God, you at least got that right.’ She kissed him on the cheek.
Hope that makes sense.
Thanks for the read.
Cheers
Karen |
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| As adorable as it gets, isn't it now??? |
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Comment by: Jorbian - 2008-09-24 20:45
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| I love flash fiction. I love things like this alot. It was great to read. |
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| Nice short and sweet story, the guy really took her snapping well! |
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Thank you for your suggestions Wanda, Arley... I have incorporated them.
I did not want to end it in a fight, that always happens right? |
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