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"The parchment of throat
A twenty-six year summer
How thirsty the sea?"
That's called Midas Touch. Tony is a gem. |
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thanks Phill and Tony..I tried my hand but could not come up with one. finally Tony helped me in getting things right. hope everyone will love this...
better luck next time to me ! :) |
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Thanks Tony..Just wanted to make it clear that It's my fault .I had tagged it a Haiku before ..But Phil reminded me of the haiku rules...I did edit it again ..am trying to make it a haiku though lol...any suggestions?
I see it 5-7-5 now....and a twist in the last line...please suggest me. |
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| I like this… the last line makes it for me. If it wasn't intended to be haiku, where’s the problem? What you have is a minimalist poem, of sorts, + some for those who contemplate beyond it. :) ~T |
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| yea thankx for reminding me, This is not a haiku...I did not know much about Haiku. Thought a twist in the third line would do the trick. But Haiku has fixed syllable patterns I learned. Thanks Phil..Sorry for the folly I committed :) |
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