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Bankrupt
I dash around the maze of alleys and city blocks
shaking with rain, touching the dampness of my hair
there’s no lid on my cup of coffee
so instead of cream I take rainwater
tasting the Earth’s tears in a styrofoam dreamcatcher.
And it feels as if I’ve been crying
but who can really tell in this weather?
The storm sounds mechanical
water against windowpanes is the tapping of keyboards
thunder is static and ringing cash registers
everyone’s eyes are the color of damp wood
as I crawl further into the Earth via escalator.
Sliding a crumpled bill though bullet proof plastic I ask myself,
how many bridges have burnt in this flood?
Down this deep the rain static is gone
turnstiles click in rhythm with woman’s pumps
only to be drowned by subway trains and shivering tracks,
not sure if the next sound will be my heart ripping apart
or automated doors parting biblically in front of me.
On days like this the world is emotionally bankrupt
but do we have enough to pay the debt?
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"a styrofoam dreamcatcher"
Imagery, imagery, and more imagery... Domenica, I hope you're printing all of these and making a collection. Every piece you write, should be cherished. You never know when you'll be displaying these on a more gradiose scale. Well done.
And you've also made me want to go enjoy the rainy day I am experiencing. |
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| beautifully written....rich and colourful and full to the brim with metaphors.....I like your style..tightly packed with no excess baggage of wordiness..every word flows off the page...I want to read more...excellent ~j~ac |
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Comment by: kc0003 - 2008-10-06 11:13
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| imagery is no stranger to your work, painting with words leaves lasting impressions on others...nicely done |
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Subtle, strong, well written, and many images to enjoy.
Who can tell if you're crying, nice.
No milk, just the earth's tears, very nice.
It has a life beat in there and keeps the reader reading, which, is a good thing.
---Greg---- |
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fantastic despair n hopelessness
in a sensational pool of surreal psychedelia
the plight of walkin thru urbania
in such a nihilistic romantic sensual
experience
great tempo
sensational colors
in forest & newyork
great poem |
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