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LouiseKay
Kirsten Locke
United States, Oregon, Vernonia

Words: 100
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Comments: 8

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Sarah's Problem

Jeans torn and wearing a shirt of indeterminate color, the young girl skittered through the large, concrete drain. Clutched within skeletal fingers a tiny ball of fluff mewled, barely a whisper of kittenish dismay. Sarah would save a life today.

Reaching the other side brought her to the hovel she called home. Ellen was still lying on the sleeping pad. Her bloodshot eyes opened as Sarah entered.

“Oh, good, you brought dinner.” Without hesitation, Ellen took the small life and bit deep into its neck with vampiric fangs. Sarah’s sister would survive her affliction at least one more day.

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karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-10-31 07:22
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Magic. Like a few others, I was dreading the sweet ending - such a great surprise.

Well done.

Cheers

Karen
BillQ Comment by: BillQ - 2008-10-13 22:37
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oh, nicely done. whack on the side of the head. and not a moment to soon, I was reaching for the insulin dose. Thanks.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-10-10 06:56
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Jason took the words right out of my mouth, Kristen. Good job!
JNeas Comment by: JNeas - 2008-10-09 16:59
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This is terrific. Great twist ending and exceptional morbib humor. I was rolling my eyes thinking it was some fluff piece about saving a kitten and then that last bit gave me a punishing kick in the nuts for doubting you.
Josh201 Comment by: Josh201 Online- 2008-10-09 15:51
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This is very good. I could say more but why?
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