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Can you breathe?
Can you move?
I am paralyzed
Excited
My heart races
Flustered and hyptnotized
My eyes meet yours
I struggle for control
Only to find
It no longer suits me
Relinquished
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Great depiction of being severely smitten, Scotty! Phil has a good point, I think it has more impact swapping ‘Hypnotized and flustered' around to ‘Flustered and hypnotized'.
