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| wow, this is amazing. Such few words send such a big chill. I am really impressed with the writing of yours that I have read thus far. I like the contrast at the beginning as compared t the end. 'Birds chirping' leaves the reader right beside the author in the first-person point of view. And then, the end, nothing, no sound except the porch light and the emotions collecting in its light. Nice work! |
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| the one inch punch translated into fiction, cool. |
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| i love flash fiction and this is a perfect example. gonna stop or the comment will be longer than the story |
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Comment by: - 2006-03-13 19:42
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| This is so simple but very brillant. |
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Comment by: ripleym Online- 2006-03-11 13:29
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I didn't comment properly in the forum, but didn't realise you had published this.
I'll quote you on a comment you left on my blog: -
'Perfect. Not a wasted word, and the structure is a good fit.' |
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