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It Just Keeps Coming
I want to ride you out of here
take me push me pull me
kick my face in somewhere else
I don't cry for show
tell me what the fuck
you're trying to say. Oh, but
here's the kicker...
I already know
Are you mad about that me
my extra sensory?
Do you fuck me harder when you resent me?
Do you want me more when I want nothing?
Wild horses wild thoughts other people
push against my
crowds and loves and
knowing
sticks to me
It just keeps coming
It just keeps coming
Like you
Like you brother.
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"do you fuck me harder when you resent me?
do you want me more when I want nothing?" - killer lines. |
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| I love it, love it love it. It's very Sylvia Plath, but in a good way, not as whiny as her stuff. I can't express how much I like this poem LOL. I'm going to add you to my readers list if you don't mind. |
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Comment by: lofty - 2006-11-21 09:09
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| oh lolly ,lolly ,lolly You made lofty,LOFTY..AWESOME.. |
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| the natural rhythm here is great, I hardly took a breath while reading it......until the last line when it took my breath! Great poem. |
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| the rhythmn, the way it scans, mimics perfectly the rough treatment described in the poem. angular, vulnerable, unrelenting. |
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