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kidquando
Ryan J. Albert
United States, Pennsylvania, Pittsburgh

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Draggin', Feenin', Nixin'

First drag was a drag first time hittin' the fag
Candy was dandy, Ciggies are handy
Packed a bowl, packed a bong, leaned to roll
Picked up a habit, daily bag had to grab it
Pack a day, crack no way, but maybe some yey
Quit soon no sweat, gotta' buy Nicorette
Breath stank like dung, got tar in the lung
Digin' the hemp, spittin' the phlegm
Just jokin', keep smokin', whole world loves tokin'
Tracheotomy hoarse spokin', soon to be croakin'
Take away the pain putin' somthin' in the vein
Feenin' feelin' sick, gotta' get the feen nix
Drop a five, drop a ten, no money again
Drop fitty and a twenty, just blew three hunny
Burned it all up to ash, burned all the spare cash
Late night feenin', for some reason, trouble sleepin'
Pill stops the chill, get just a little ill
Saw a chick wit her husband drunk on his lovin'
Met a cat and his wife all highed up on life
Older people get, more appreciate it
Time to time its fine to get sublime
Open with care when opening the mind
Experimentation should always carry doubt
Pandora couldn't put back what was let out

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PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-04-07 10:51
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I love how someone asked if you were a hippie.

I smoke and people ask if and when I am going to quit.

I say, "quit? Hell I am trying to smoke more."

I think this has a great flow and beat to it.

"Pills stop the chill" Boy don't they. LOVE my pain pills.

This was very creative, great rhyme scheme, and are you a hippie?

LOL

Sheri**
GrkGrl Comment by: GrkGrl - 2007-03-12 10:47
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what a clever way of doing this...and the progression is smooth...i like it alot....good way to suggest to "Just Say No"....heh
rjaye21 Comment by: rjaye21 - 2007-01-20 12:33
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hahaha,
Hi, I really enjoyed reading this. It's sharp and witty.

Thanks
jakemac Comment by: jakemac - 2006-10-22 20:09
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one of the rare, good rhyme schemes, i dig man i dig... but drugs are cool... so, eh.
PenToPaperNYC Comment by: PenToPaperNYC - 2006-08-08 15:13
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im sure this brings back memories for many, myself included. so what habits have you wound up with? which have you "kicked"? it's alot easier to write about things you know, right? Loved it.
P.S. are you a hippy?
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