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A Word for Tyler
I never knew him that well,
but the class was naked without his laughter,
and rather, silence sat as his bare desk,
meeting our eyes of disbelief;
death knows no age,
thinks nothing of beauty,
or the promises we wanted desperately to keep;
we can scream our angry questions
and believe me, beneath a calmly disheartened guise
I screamed til my throat bled
and yet, death stood voiceless,
staring at me from just across the room,
where he'll be 'til my number's up;
it almost helps now to think I'm stepping up in line.
here I am, praying to a God that I refuse to believe in,
who called for me while I was on the other line,
hoping for your sake
that he's as loving and forgiving
as I never knew him to be;
now I'm left to wonder,
thrown to the lions of my thoughts,
what could have been, what would be
and why we would have neither;
and part of me will always be
two seats back, one to the right,
wishing you were here.
so God bless you, if he can,
and I swear I'll do my best to save you
if you do your best to remember me
when I see you again...
-rest easy, Tyler Rosenberger-
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Comment by: CK Gage - 2008-04-22 19:00
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| Wow! your emotions hit home! Talent is the poem that takes you to another time or place. Yours did just that! Took me back to sophmore year in high school, an art class I shared with a guy named Jack who sat across the room...there one Friday. Gone forever on Monday. I too hope he remembers me when I see him again. |
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rereading this poem 2 years on I can see even more depth to this than I could see originally. Your biblical imagery is brilliant- I'm unsure if all of it is even intentional? ('thrown to the lions of my thoughts', brings Daniel to mind, however God saved Daniel from his thoughts, your poem doesn't imply a similar fate).
All in all this is beautiful, touching and even if I may say so flippant(I can't think of a better word), but without being glib 'and part of me will always be
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Comment by: - 2007-07-27 13:20
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This is great. You go for the complicated ideas and emotions and the apparent contradictions where most would have just gotten gushy and weepy or tried too hard to say something "meaningful"... "and believe me, beneath a calmly disheartened guise/ I screamed til my throat bled." The voice is personal and intimate without pandering to emotionalism; the restraint is what gives the emotion its subtle power here. Another highlight for me was: "and part of me will always be/ two seats back, one to the right,/ wishing you were here."
The only suggestion I have is that lions should be singular... the -s sound doesn't work for me there.
This is going to the library. |
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Comment by: mootiy - 2007-05-16 10:03
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| You really get a feel for the saddness of this loss, sounds really great. well done. |
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| This honest anguish of addressing death surprises me, and moves me. |
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"Marginal Man"
Collection of poetry by NiK covering an historical sweep through the poet's life during the turbulent years of change in Southern Africa between 1973 and 2000.
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