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Screaming Silence v2.0
Sometimes this page is a desert,
Dry and choked with the bones
Of undone songs and poems,
Made brittle by the kiss of time.
Sometimes these eyes are restless
Glancing from space to space
Drawn to the empty places,
Snowblind in the light of dawn.
I know
I must move
To create Stillness,
Dance somehow
Into this restless void.
I know
I must speak
To create Silence,
And pour poems
Into my empy eyes.
I know and yet I bleed frustration,
kicking at ever shifting dunes,
I know and hear the whirlwind rising
Screaming Silence into my lifeless Muse.
My eloquence falls away from me
Like a suicide from a cliff...
And in this stuttering lack of rhythm
Words fail me like a well oiled lie!
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Comment by: - 2006-05-30 13:31
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| I really like the way you have structured this. The air given to the middle section and the speed in frustration to the remaining stanzas. Middle section and closing stanza, best bits for me, loved it all but those bits escpecially. |
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Comment by: Teri - 2006-05-22 16:38
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| I love the middle of this piece, the way you have it laid out! It reminded me an entire thought process, form in the first few stanzas and then the disconnected lines and then back to form again. A perfect visual for the subject matter. Nice work, as always, Daniele! |
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| this piece was wonderful, i really enjoyed it. i especially liked the way that the poem itself was formated, whether or not i actually feel that it affected the overall effectiveness of the poem, i'm not sure, but i thought it was cool. |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-18 19:51
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wow.
"My eloquence falls away from me
Like a suicide from a cliff..."
these lines are absolutely classic and amazing and wow. i really love the whole poem, as it's stunningly gorgeous. but these lines just really got to me. great write:) |
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Comment by: nesca - 2006-05-18 00:45
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hey paesano, this is eloquent and beautiful, deep in meaning, simple in delivery, thsi si right on brother, love your work always...
tony |
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