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gothtearsdarknes
Crimson Brassfield
United States, I Stand Alone, In The Dark

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Vampire's Revenge

Lost in the woods
Look left, right
He shouldn't be here
At this time of night
But it's perfect timing
For my sweet revenge
I tried it once
But killed another
His SIGNIFICANT other
To lure him into my torturous trap
I hummed a tune he had heard me sing
Not too long ago
He starts to run
But a bad way for him
I leap, Pin him on the ground
The terror in his eyes excites me
But I spare no energy, emotion
Instead I say
"I've killed a million petty souls, but I couldn't kill you."
Now laying in his open casket
Eyes lacking luster
I remember watching the light fade away
They all mourn
I sit atop a hill
Looking down at them
Pain still in my heart...
I laugh

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Min Comment by: Min - 2006-03-30 05:35
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perhaps 'lacklustre' would sit better (sorry, 'lackluster' U.S.) and 'lying' in his casket.
Word missing from 'But...'

Again a wonderful gory description
Comment by: - 2006-03-17 18:40
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I don't know why I'm posting a comment, considering you're right next to me, but I like it anyway. lol. very vengeful.
Comment by: - 2006-03-17 15:17
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another dark story.. like the little twists in your work
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