Cinderella story (for my mom)
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Cinderella story (for my mom)
You with your crown on display
(is it just me or are you smirking?)
am I always this way?
or didn't you beat me hard enough
or tell me how you hated me so much
yesterday?
you who keeps pieces of your broken glass shoe,
(and still clings to worn red carpets)
do you want me to be you?
or not go what you went through?
or be myself
but doing what you wanted to?
You when you pause and look ahead,
and forget about yourself for a moment,
or about me
and just be
breathing
you could be so beautiful.
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Comment by: - 2006-12-22 09:01
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| very balanced, i like how you simultaneously explore the tension between mother and daughter, yet still show the mother as independent of the relationship, a human in her own right. hard to be that unselfish, easier to merely focus on ourselves, neh? |
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| hmmm...expectation? by mum, dad, school... have i lived up to theres...hmmm...maybe not but i dont have to...haha...and i love the poem, very good |
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Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-05-15 18:11
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| The mother-daughter conflict is very common. And also very tense. Riddled with past difficulties, and marred by the mother's expectations of her daughter. This is all described here very well. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-18 02:07
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| i understand , sweet poem |
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| very strong imagery and symbolism here. makes me look at cinderella in a different light...a little less of a fairytale. |
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