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Spank
I think I need a spanking. And not just any spanking... a really creative one like with a wooden mixing spoon from the kitchen or a studded belt from Poser's in L.A. or one of those straps the shoe shine guys use or a dirty hand.
I think I need a few bruises.
I think I need a tattoo.
I might need you.
If someone doesn't tame me soon I might destroy the universe.
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A little short, but I still think it works. Interesting.
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Comment by: fredav - 2006-09-02 23:27
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| I agree with Catman. This is too short. I wanna read more of this. =) |
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Wonderfully fun poem, with a great mix of need and teasing.
I get the impression this used to be longer from some of the comments; would loved to have read the original version, as this one seems to end a bit abruptly to me. |
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| Excellent poem--concrete, concise, and interesting. |
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| Don't know why, but this piece made me think of that song "Shout pt. 1 & 2". Can't think of the group, but it's in Animal House, you know it. Anyway... I got this song in my head, but they are saying spank instead of shout and each one of your "creative spanks" is rolling through my head to the music like some odd music video... a little bit louder now... a little bit louder now... point to this rambling is that any piece that can stick that into my already crowded head is alright by me. Nice one. |
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