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Tripping My Exit

I'll be leaving once
I can breathe through the nausea
that's trickling in
with the roaches
to the sticky spot on your rug.

I know you want me
out of here
but my face is being crushed from the inside
By images of this distorted ecstasy
and the hallucinogenic craving
that drew me in.

Give me a moment
to lift my head
from under your saturnine gaze
And I will collect my morality,
find my rings,
and leave a few pieces of sloughed off glitter
from the skirt you couldn't wait to discard.

Next time I try to sabotage
this impatient longing for affection
with such fugitive, deteriorating pleasure
Turn me away, won't you?

I'll be trying not to remember
your tongue's cold, dishonest kiss
and the way you avoided looking at me
While I awkwardly zipped up my boots
and muddied up my heels
tripping my exit across your lawn.

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Comment by: - 2006-10-09 15:17
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HI, I like your poem a lot, it really conveys a feeling. Easy to connect with.
Comment by: - 2006-04-08 23:52
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this is really well written. i felt moved to read this, as the title is amazing. absolutely love it. great write.
Comment by: - 2006-04-02 19:46
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I like the way you intermingled metaphor will real action. It added to the power and realism. A great line: "but my face is being crushed from the inside". The whole poem reminded me of the harsh reality of nightclubs when the harsh overhead lights are switched on at closing time. The last stanza is amazing.
rich1982 Comment by: rich1982 - 2006-03-30 10:35
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This is really really good. Powerful work with a bitter, honest, tone. It convinced me from the first stanza; the filth and regret is depicted well but not OTT, almost understated. Nice ending.
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2006-03-28 17:00
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Give me a moment
to lift my head
from under your saturnine gaze
And I will collect my morality

I kept going back to these lines after reading the poem. Strong and powerful poem.
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